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3 years ago ::
Jan 26, 2010 - 12:53PM
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chapter 1-The juice bar--------------------------------------------- Well I'm trying this because OGluke said to so here it goes: One afternoon at a juice bar a happy deadpool marches in..Deadpool:good afternoon bartender!I would like 1 pint of vodka! bartender:Sir we don't serve alcohol, this is a juice bar. Deadpool:Then why do you call it a bar? *deadpool then sees a beautiful women next to him* Deadpool:hey there hot legs! Women:go away pig *walks away* Suddenly a group of the brotherhood storm in.. Brotherhood member:Everyone get on the fucking ground!*starts firing gun* The shots fired kills the women next to Deadpool
Deadpool pulls out his katana and slashes the head off one of the members.
The other members start firing at him causing many casualties but not hitting him.Deadpool pulls out two uzi's and kills two more members then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that I was going to score with someday maybe!" .... So how was it? oh and this is how he looks:  ------------------------------------------ I have changed the name so I could have chapters in it
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 7:22PM
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Well I'm trying this because OGluke said to so here it goes:
One afternoon at a juice bar a happy deadpool marches in..
Deadpool:good afternoon bartender!I would like 1 pint of vodka!
bartender:Sir we don't serve alcohol, this is a juice bar.
Deadpool:Then why do you call it a bar?
*deadpool then sees a beautiful women next to him*
Deadpool:hey there hot legs!
Women:go away pig *walks away*
Suddenly a group of the brotherhood storm in..
Brotherhood member:Everyone get on the fucking ground!*starts firing gun*
The shots fired kills the women next to Deadpool
Deadpool pulls out his katana and slashes the head off one of the members.
The other members start firing at him causing many casualties but not hitting him.
Deadpool pulls out two uzi's and kills two more members
then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!"
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So how was it?[/quote]
I knew youd come around.
As for the story, goodstarters man.. Keep it going!
My fav part.. then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!" HAHA!
See that huge hole in the ground, that's my expectation for Saints Row4.
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 7:23PM
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Well I'm trying this because OGluke said to so here it goes:
One afternoon at a juice bar a happy deadpool marches in..
Deadpool:good afternoon bartender!I would like 1 pint of vodka!
bartender:Sir we don't serve alcohol, this is a juice bar.
Deadpool:Then why do you call it a bar?
*deadpool then sees a beautiful women next to him*
Deadpool:hey there hot legs!
Women:go away pig *walks away*
Suddenly a group of the brotherhood storm in..
Brotherhood member:Everyone get on the fucking ground!*starts firing gun*
The shots fired kills the women next to Deadpool
Deadpool pulls out his katana and slashes the head off one of the members.
The other members start firing at him causing many casualties but not hitting him.
Deadpool pulls out two uzi's and kills two more members
then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!"
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So how was it?[/quote]
I knew youd come around.
As for the story, goodstarters man.. Keep it going!
My fav part.. then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!" HAHA![/quote]
thanks I just typed random things in my head
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 7:28PM
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Well I'm trying this because OGluke said to so here it goes:
One afternoon at a juice bar a happy deadpool marches in..
Deadpool:good afternoon bartender!I would like 1 pint of vodka!
bartender:Sir we don't serve alcohol, this is a juice bar.
Deadpool:Then why do you call it a bar?
*deadpool then sees a beautiful women next to him*
Deadpool:hey there hot legs!
Women:go away pig *walks away*
Suddenly a group of the brotherhood storm in..
Brotherhood member:Everyone get on the fucking ground!*starts firing gun*
The shots fired kills the women next to Deadpool
Deadpool pulls out his katana and slashes the head off one of the members.
The other members start firing at him causing many casualties but not hitting him.
Deadpool pulls out two uzi's and kills two more members
then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!"
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So how was it?[/quote]
I knew youd come around.
As for the story, goodstarters man.. Keep it going!
My fav part.. then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that was was going to score with someday maybe!" HAHA![/quote]
thanks I just typed random things in my head[/quote]
Wanna know something?
So did i.
Started out the same way.. you might not think much of it now, but the more you continue with this, the more you'll feel proud of it.
Listen to me, i sound very cheesey like pizza lol.
Like i said, keep going, get more random.. i bet by the end it's gunna be totally random, and funny as fucking fuck!
Groove it up, be groovy baby!
See that huge hole in the ground, that's my expectation for Saints Row4.
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 7:30PM
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Wanna know something?
So did i.
Started out the same way.. you might not think much of it now, but the more you continue with this, the more you'll feel proud of it.
Listen to me, i sound very cheesey like pizza lol.
Like i said, keep going, get more random.. i bet by the end it's gunna be totally random, and funny as fucking fuck!
Groove it up, be groovy baby![/quote]
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 8:32PM
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Now I'm going to try part two:
Brotherhood member:*calls homies on cell* get over to the juice bar there's a some kind of psycho loaded with...
*Gunshot*
Deadpool:hello Mr.Asshole is busy right now can I take a message?
A brotherhood truck bashes through the wall throwing deadpool across the room
Deadpool:Do you know its rude to interrupt a conversation?*Starts shooting*
with all the gang members dead the rest of the brotherhood are notified...
Deadpool:awe well hope these guys forgive and forget!*steals the truck and trys to get to forgive and forget*
On the way more Brotherhood members charge up next to Deadpool in their brutishtrucks styled in red screaming:"you'll get yours you piece of shit!"
Deadpool:With this tube for the conveyance of fluid I bid you GOOD NIGHT!*drops pipe bomb destroying two cars*
Later at the Forgive and forget drive through...
Deadpool:You see I was accused of killing people I didn't kill so can you cover it up by framing my neighbour?
Forgive and forget employee:You are forgiven
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is it good or bad?
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 10:21PM
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Well I'm trying this because OGluke said to so here it goes:
One afternoon at a juice bar a happy deadpool marches in..
Deadpool:good afternoon bartender!I would like 1 pint of vodka!
bartender:Sir we don't serve alcohol, this is a juice bar.
Deadpool:Then why do you call it a bar?
*deadpool then sees a beautiful women next to him*
Deadpool:hey there hot legs!
Women:go away pig *walks away*
Suddenly a group of the brotherhood storm in..
Brotherhood member:Everyone get on the fucking ground!*starts firing gun*
The shots fired kills the women next to Deadpool
Deadpool pulls out his katana and slashes the head off one of the members.
The other members start firing at him causing many casualties but not hitting him.
Deadpool pulls out two uzi's and kills two more members
then deadpool screams out a cheesy one liner:"you killed the nice deranged lady that I was going to score with someday maybe!"
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So how was it?
oh and this is how he looks:
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haha funny story :lol:
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5 years ago ::
Aug 13, 2008 - 11:40PM
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I really don't find it that funny/entertaining...
It has potential if you stick with it, however.
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5 years ago ::
Aug 14, 2008 - 9:33AM
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Now I'm going to try part two:
Brotherhood member:*calls homies on cell* get over to the juice bar there's a some kind of psycho loaded with...
*Gunshot*
Deadpool:hello Mr.Asshole is busy right now can I take a message?
A brotherhood truck bashes through the wall throwing deadpool across the room
Deadpool:Do you know its rude to interrupt a conversation?*Starts shooting*
with all the gang members dead the rest of the brotherhood are notified...
Deadpool:awe well hope these guys forgive and forget!*steals the truck and trys to get to forgive and forget*
On the way more Brotherhood members charge up next to Deadpool in their brutishtrucks styled in red screaming:"you'll get yours you piece of shit!"
Deadpool:With this tube for the conveyance of fluid I bid you GOOD NIGHT!*drops pipe bomb destroying two cars*
Later at the Forgive and forget drive through...
Deadpool:You see I was accused of killing people I didn't kill so can you cover it up by framing my neighbour?
Forgive and forget employee:You are forgiven
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is it good or bad?[/quote]
Not good, not bad, but Excellent!
I like the ForgiveNForget part.. He does all that crazy shit, then goes to FNF then Bam! all your sins, are forgiven my child lol.
See that huge hole in the ground, that's my expectation for Saints Row4.
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5 years ago ::
Aug 16, 2008 - 11:13PM
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Now I'm going to try part two:
Brotherhood member:*calls homies on cell* get over to the juice bar there's a some kind of psycho loaded with...
*Gunshot*
Deadpool:hello Mr.Asshole is busy right now can I take a message?
A brotherhood truck bashes through the wall throwing deadpool across the room
Deadpool:Do you know its rude to interrupt a conversation?*Starts shooting*
with all the gang members dead the rest of the brotherhood are notified...
Deadpool:awe well hope these guys forgive and forget!*steals the truck and trys to get to forgive and forget*
On the way more Brotherhood members charge up next to Deadpool in their brutishtrucks styled in red screaming:"you'll get yours you piece of shit!"
Deadpool:With this tube for the conveyance of fluid I bid you GOOD NIGHT!*drops pipe bomb destroying two cars*
Later at the Forgive and forget drive through...
Deadpool:You see I was accused of killing people I didn't kill so can you cover it up by framing my neighbour?
Forgive and forget employee:You are forgiven
...
is it good or bad?[/quote]
To be honest, when i first saw it, i was like "Deadpool, huh?"
I opened it, and it's a great story, keep writing it, man.
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